Ani May Queen

I use the computer. I always make mistakes in the first draft, or want to take out something or add something, and the computer is, of course, the easiest place ...

I'm kind of annoyed at the story though. It seems like it is inappropriate for a prologue, perhaps it would be better if it was at the beginning of Chapter ...

Great start, it sounds one of those movies were you see some old wise man reading a prophsey out of a old, large book. I didn't really like the fact ...

Hehe, this is really great. I suck at reviews so don't expect me to tell you anything helpful. I just wanted to say that I read this and that I ...

Good description and a good hook? English teachers must love you. The description is AMAZING and the opening really sucks you into the rest of it. Please continue, I'd love ...

Hehe, they made me chuckle. Actualy I didn't chuckle, I just smiled and felt happy but you get the picture. Very nice and cute, short poems are always fun. It's ...

Hi Ginny, thanks for commenting on my story! I can't wait to read some of your stuff, so feel free to tell me if you get any up! P.S. I'm ...

Okay, thank you Ginny. I'd realize it was too long till you mentioned it but then I read it out loud and realized "wow, that's really long and annoying!" So ...

Second vignette, hope you like. My English teacher did at least. I got an A! Yay for me! Stones can be either very hot or very cold, depending on the ...

Use all caps only to make a really, really, really loud noise. Always use an exclamation mark and never use all caps frequently. I changed one of them I think, ...

Thanks for the advice. The reason there were no speech marks is because in the vignettes I was reading the author didn't use any and I though it might add ...

This is a collection of three vignettes I had to write for school, but I thought they just might be good enough to share with you! They are in a ...

Thanks for your advice, I really appriciate it. But please don't just limit yourself to critiqueing, I'd like to know if you like it or not to. :D Also I ...

In an ordinary world, through an ordinary town, in which there was an ordinary street, there walked a…not so ordinary woman. I like the opening, its different and not clichéd. ...

Your right about it not seeming to belong in Fantasy...but I'll reserve judgement till the next installment. Otherwise it wasn't that badly written. It does need work though along with ...